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I would completely drop the recruiter job you worked for only one month. It really isn't sysadmin related, and any job that is only worked for a month isn't worthwhile putting on a resume anyway.
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Drop the System Administration Title , on the top, under your contact info. Also bring your certs up to the top. While it is pretty stupid, many jobs require a certain certification before they will be considered. So it is helpful to put your certs towards the top. Your certs tell the story of your skills right off the bat. I can see you know hardware, networking, security, and project management. That is a big plus.
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I would also get rid of the whole proficient, basic proficiency, and some exposure areas. If I was hiring for a System Admin position that managed a virtual environment with Hyper-V, just seeing some exposure on a resume would not excite me. Even though you are obviously proficient enough to learn hyper-v and manage it if you needed to do so.
Since you have worked with Hyper-V I would just list it under Virtualization Technologies and get rid of the 3 separate categories.
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If you wanted to leave the proficiency tiers with programming that would work, but remember alot of positions may call for Powershell experience when it is mostly just editing scripts or googling already made scripts. So when an employer sees some exposure that sounds kind of bad even though you are capable of editing scripts and copy, pasting, and editing from google. Bosses that hire don't always understand the background magic.
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I would go from this :
Engineering Firm – Here, Kentuckiana 12/2013 – present
Systems Administrator
• Supported 30+ Engineers on numerous Linux distributions and numerous versions of Microsoft Windows.
• Implemented a new Microsoft Windows Domain
• Managed two KVMQEMU Hypervisors and all associated workloads
• Implemented a Nagios network monitoring solution.
• Migrated a locally hosted public website and new ecommerce site to an AWSEC2 instance to provide
greater reliability and availability.
• Provisioned a Dockerbased implementation of Discourse to host the company's new product support forums
on an AWSEC2 instance.
• Designed and configured entire infrastructure for new office including, but not limited to, purchasing and
installing new switch infrastructure, wiring and terminating endpoints, moving existing infrastructure into
new racks, and sourcing/purchasing all necessary hardware and equipment.
• Migrated old PBX system from an older outdated Asterisk server configured to work with the previous PRI
provider, to a newer FreePBX system with a SIP provider, resulting in annual savings of approximately 90%
($5,520 annual cost reduced to ~$600 annually).
• Wrote software in BASH used to automate the process of imaging SD cards used in proprietary hardware.
The program was used to replace the previous software that was no longer supported and did not work with
newer high capacity SD cards.
To this:
Engineering Firm – Here, Kentuckiana 12/2013 – present
Systems Administrator
• Supported Linux and Windows Workstations ( 30 isn't that impressive on paper. You might move workstation support towards the bottom since you are looking for System Admin positions)
• Implemented, Configured, Secured, and Administered a Windows 2012 domain (This wording comes directly from Microsoft cert tests and it sounds fancy).
• Managed two KVMQEMU Hypervisors and all associated workloads
• Implemented a Nagios network monitoring solution and improved network security, speed, and admin efficiency (gotta love buzz words)
• Migrated a locally hosted public website and new ecommerce site to an AWSEC2 instance to provide
greater reliability and availability.
• Provisioned a Dockerbased implementation of Discourse to host the company's new product support forums
on an AWSEC2 instance.
• Designed and configured entire infrastructure for new office including, but not limited to, purchasing and
installing new switch infrastructure, wiring and terminating endpoints, moving existing infrastructure into
new racks, and sourcing/purchasing all necessary hardware and equipment.
• Migrated old PBX system from an older outdated Asterisk server configured to work with the previous PRI
provider, to a newer FreePBX system with a SIP provider, resulting in annual savings of approximately 90%
($5,520 annual cost reduced to ~$600 annually).
• Wrote software in BASH used to automate the process of imaging SD cards used in proprietary hardware.
The program was used to replace the previous software that was no longer supported and did not work with
newer high capacity SD cards.
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I normally try to keep each job to 3 to 5 bullet points.
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@RamblingBiped said in Resume Feedback:
@scottalanmiller said in Resume Feedback:
PDF often works best.
Whenever I submit a resume to a potential employer I do always put it in PDF format unless otherwise specified. I've also been thinking of designing a web-based resume using Bootstrap. Do you think that would be worthwhile?
I'm sure it is valuable for someone, but I've never dealt with any employer who works with that process. SO can't say how valuable it would be. Marginally, I would guess.
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@RamblingBiped said in Resume Feedback:
@scottalanmiller said in Resume Feedback:
PDF often works best.
Whenever I submit a resume to a potential employer I do always put it in PDF format unless otherwise specified.
I meant for sharing with us
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I'd cut this entire section. You don't have a title outside of a job, putting one in is weird and will limit your availability to other jobs. No need for an address. Put your market if you want (mine has says "Available Globally, US Citizen" for a decade without any locality info, and email and phone is okay. But don't make it too specific, only include was is useful. Technical qualifications is included in your history, no need to repeat.
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Shorten this. This is way too long for what it says. And change the order. You want to highlight the Sec+ and the Net+ while downplaying the Pro+ and the A+. Make this a two column list and put these side by side with the Sec+ in the top left and hte Net+ below it and the A+ in the bottom right.
Collapse that Education to like two lines at most and no bullet point for a single item. More like this...
Richland Community College, IL. 2011
AS Computer Science, High Academic HonorsIt's a resume, less is more.
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This table is just enormous. I'm with @IRJ that you need to remove the tiering and make this a tight, small list.
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I think that with some good effort you are reasonably looking at being able to condense this to a single page. between removing the top, and cutting the space used for the top table and the bottom list in half, it's only a matter of reducing the large, sprawling bullet points from the job histories.
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Thanks for the feedback everyone. I'm going to look at making revisions when I get home later this evening. At that point I'll try to get an updated PDF posted for further critique.
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See if you can get down to a single page. It's a big effort, but often well worth it. It forces you to squeeze out any extra stuff. Extra words, lines, whatever. Distil, distil, distil.
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@scottalanmiller said in Resume Feedback:
See if you can get down to a single page. It's a big effort, but often well worth it. It forces you to squeeze out any extra stuff. Extra words, lines, whatever. Distil, distil, distil.
I'm thinking simplification of the table by removing the tiers of familiarity and dropping bullet points will help with that. I'll cut down the heading, drop the recruiting position, and chop the education section as suggested. Hopefully those changes paired with a different font/combination of fonts will accomplish that.
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I'm currently working on a degree in Software Development, should I put the unfinished degree on my resume as well?
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@RamblingBiped said in Resume Feedback:
I'm currently working on a degree in Software Development, should I put the unfinished degree on my resume as well?
You can and put it as anticipated.
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@RamblingBiped said in Resume Feedback:
I'm currently working on a degree in Software Development, should I put the unfinished degree on my resume as well?
Are you months or years away from it? If you are in year 1 of 4 then it really doesn't say much, but if you are 6 months away from graduating that says a different story.
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@RamblingBiped said in Resume Feedback:
I'm currently working on a degree in Software Development, should I put the unfinished degree on my resume as well?
Keep in mind that (serious) development requires years of experience and analytical skills. Mention that, but don't put it above everything else.
It's like writing a book: Most people can write, but writing a good book is a whole different story.
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@IRJ said in Resume Feedback:
@RamblingBiped said in Resume Feedback:
I'm currently working on a degree in Software Development, should I put the unfinished degree on my resume as well?
Are you months or years away from it? If you are in year 1 of 4 then it really doesn't say much, but if you are 6 months away from graduating that says a different story.
I pretty much always put it if I am working on it. If there is like a set date or proposed one, you know.
