Resume Critique
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Your summary of qualifications is supposed to be your 10 seconds sales pitch, because you dont know if someone is going to read the rest of the resume. You also want to set expectations for the way they will read the rest of your resume.
The buzzwords you have listed here, dont mean anything to anybody. We all know they are feel good, and dont have any meat to them. Io like that you list your total experience and your industries, but I would do that in bullet points. The first two times I looked at your resume, I focused on bullet points not text above it.
Not only should you list your experience and industries, but you should throw your best shit here. If you could tell me 3 reasons of what separates you from others and why I should hire you for this NEW position not the old one (you are currently working). As in show me you are ready for the next level.
- 20 + years experience in IT across system administration, support, and maintenance
- Experience with Healthcare and Retail industries.
- Reason 1
- Reason 2
- Reason 3
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It almost looks like your current/last role was a step down from what you were doing before. Perhaps the pay was higher, but you are listing mostly hardware in your last position and you list Windows 10 as your top proficiency.
Rose Radiology was somewhat impressive and you showcase an architectural and server skillset. Then we see a move into a hardware role, and it appears to not even be a customer facing hardware role, which is even less common.
I guess the question here is do you want to continue to work with hardware or do you want to get back to system administration and SMB IT? If you do, you need to seriously think about how you list your job duties at Beall and try to tweak them to line up more with system administration (without lying of course).
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@IRJ said in Resume Critique:
Your summary of qualifications is supposed to be your 10 seconds sales pitch
And this one is just filler. Remove all of what is there. Everyone is "motivated" and a "team player." Those are filler words that don't mean anything. At best, it is ignored.
You want to put what matters most up top, not filler. Your prime real estate is wasted.
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Highest level advice: Condense
I can't tell due to the sloppy Google formatting, but it looks like this goes to two pages? If so, figure out how to get it to one page. One solid, dense, easy to read page will get you a lot further. All impact, no filler.
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Something that most IT people struggle with (I did) is selling ourselves. I always wanted to only put in the things that were clear and 100% accurate and measurable. The reality is that the value that you deliver to your employer is mostly neither. To get past the "meh" level of resume you need to make a case for that value. You supported hardware and closed tickets... ok... That is great, I guess. What exemplified your delivery of those services? Why did the company choose to pay you instead of someone else? Why would you hire you?
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I personally would recommend removing your phone number and email from the public copy for now.
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Reduce the spacing between your bullet points, to much wasted space.
Try and get it to fit all on a page if you can (its understandable if you really can't though).
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@DustinB3403 said in Resume Critique:
Reduce the spacing between your bullet points, to much wasted space.
That's the formatting I was mentioning, was thinking that that might just be Google formatting something that looked better in Word.
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Doing nothing other than cleaning up the header and removing white space, we get to one page this easily...
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There are no overall job titles or descriptions. Those would help as it is unclear what your job role was meant to be in many of these.
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There is a lot of stuff on there that I'd want to avoid unless you are looking for a specialty hardware management job... like hardware testing, RMA paperwork, etc. Those are legit tasks that are done, but not things you want to highlight or mention. Especially on the resume.
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@scottalanmiller said in Resume Critique:
There is a lot of stuff on there that I'd want to avoid unless you are looking for a specialty hardware management job... like hardware testing, RMA paperwork, etc. Those are legit tasks that are done, but not things you want to highlight or mention. Especially on the resume.
Yeah it makes his latest job look like a step or even two backwards.
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Did a bit of a rewrite. Not knowing any of the jobs, all I can really do is remove stuff, not add stuff. If we talked about it, I bet we could easily find highlights to add.
Pretty much I eliminated the things you want to avoid mentioning as they didn't look good. And I removed redundant stuff and old stuff that didn't matter and anything that was filler. You could do a lot to clean up wording, capitalization, etc.
But with a quick eye, you can see how much a hiring manager would have seen as filler from the original document to this one.
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@scottalanmiller said in Resume Critique:
@alex-olynyk said in Resume Critique:
I dont see a file upload button on the toolbar and I cant drag and drop either. It says I dont have enough privileges to upload a file.
There is no file upload feature. File uploads cause a lot of complexity. You can do something like post images or most people link to a Google Docs file. That works pretty well.
Incorrect. There is a file upload feature. You simply choose to have it disabled. For perfectly valid reasons, but still your choice.
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@JaredBusch said in Resume Critique:
@scottalanmiller said in Resume Critique:
@alex-olynyk said in Resume Critique:
I dont see a file upload button on the toolbar and I cant drag and drop either. It says I dont have enough privileges to upload a file.
There is no file upload feature. File uploads cause a lot of complexity. You can do something like post images or most people link to a Google Docs file. That works pretty well.
Incorrect. There is a file upload feature. You simply choose to have it disabled. For perfectly valid reasons, but still your choice.
I mean on MangoLassi there is no feature.
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@alex-olynyk remove your phone number and email from this document... Ffs are you wanting to be spammed?
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@DustinB3403 said in Resume Critique:
@alex-olynyk remove your phone number and email from this document... Ffs are you wanting to be spammed?
Calm your panties. It's a resume that is public shared via Google drive link. Pretty common and he can remove access at any point
